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It is not the anger in your voice that scares me.
What is rage in the face of infatuation?
                    though I rage at myself

       But these are the things I fear:
          the silence in your whisper
          the heat of your skin

    It is not the arrogance of your smile that disgusts me.
What role does contempt play in lust?
                    though I feel contempt for myself

       But these are the things I loathe:
          your effortless charisma
          my effortless weakness

    It is not the shape of your fist that hurts me.
What can pain tell me that love has not?
                    though I am in agony

       But these things cause me sorrow:
          your absence
          your vanity

    It is not the contours of your face that bind me.
For what is flesh but a fleeting pleasure?
                   though it is akin to torture

       But these are the things I love:
          the line of your jaw
          the hair on your chest

       And these are the things I treasure:
          the evil in your eye
          the width of your wrist

       And these are the things I dream:
          the heat of your passion
          the ice in your heart

You are imperfect.
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Uhm. >.>

I wrote this for somebody. Hopefully, if they read it, they'll know who they are, lol.

It was written a few years ago, and so while the sentiment was heartfelt, it is also fairly distant now. So comforting comments, although always appreciated, would be more useful if, in fact, they were a critique of the technique or something. Thats not to say general comments aren't also appreciated :giggle:

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you know what? I LOVE this!! It's covers a lot of things I like to tell someone.. :D

wow!! very nice!!

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~Falsehood is easy, truth so difficult - George Eliot~
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Yeah me too, lol. Thanks so much :hug:

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To her fair works did Nature link
The human soul that through me ran;
And much it grieved my heart to think
What man has made of man.

~Wordsworth
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wow, once again seriously good!

like the other one, the language is still quiet delicate and distant like its being whispered but its still dramatic and powerful. (id go on about how its like a geishas dance but i think you'd just get bored)

again really good! :hug:

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Aw. Thank you once again :hug: you're comments are so lovely :D Also much more professional sounding and stuff :giggle:

But a Geisha dance? It is not quite so delicate and lovely yet :)

--
To her fair works did Nature link
The human soul that through me ran;
And much it grieved my heart to think
What man has made of man.

~Wordsworth
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i was thinking of a geisha dance i saw in japan once, and she was running around looking all angsty and throwing her body all over the place, but still, somehow it looked really graceful and controlled, and the music was all plinky plonky and clumsy sounding, but it still sounded haunting and elegant. (i was thinking waterfall when i heard it)

yeah, I try to be helpful with comments, but i always mean what i say and you are a very talented writer! :#1:

my comments may sound lovely but seriously, you should hear my rants! i spit poison (perfect example~ my journal yesterday! ouch)

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Who was the first person to look at a cow and say, "I think I'll squeeze these dangly things here and drink what comes out"?
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Visit my profile!!! :dance: [link]:dance:
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Well thank you so much :hug: Your comments are very very appreciated ^-^; I checked out your Journal and replied, btw, I think it was awesome. And although I still resist the Geisha comparison, I love the way you talk me up :icongwomp: Thanks again!!!!

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To her fair works did Nature link
The human soul that through me ran;
And much it grieved my heart to think
What man has made of man.

~Wordsworth
:iconakaneflower456:
trust me, after years of having a reasonably wealthy but weak willed father, you become a master at talking people round.

Yesterday we went out to get him a new suit and ended up also buying me shoes, a dress, an eyeliner, a wii game and some jewellery. Yay! more stuff to fill my en suite bathroom turned walk-in wardrobe! :iconfurrydanceplz:

I like giving helpful comments not just "great job, go you!" thats usually why my comments end up being long, advice and critique along with insane ramblings. Like this one!

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Who was the first person to look at a cow and say, "I think I'll squeeze these dangly things here and drink what comes out"?
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Visit my profile!!! :dance: [link]:dance:
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Lol, and they are best kind of comments! Dont ever be sorry for them it is so much more fun to find a comment that takes more than 3 seconds to read :giggle: Anywayz, good job on the "suit buying" trip XD, what wii game did you get?

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To her fair works did Nature link
The human soul that through me ran;
And much it grieved my heart to think
What man has made of man.

~Wordsworth
:iconakaneflower456:
yay! im glad someone likes my loooooo%!ooooong comments!

yup, i is good at that, i just give daddy my cute look and call him daddy a lot. Its an art, it really is.

ooh, i got that Mario/sonic olymipics! Its so fun! i seriously play video games waay too much!

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Who was the first person to look at a cow and say, "I think I'll squeeze these dangly things here and drink what comes out"?
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Visit my profile!!! :dance: [link]:dance:
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How freaking awesome is the trampoline jumping game!!!!!!!!!! I LOVE IT SO MUCH XD

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To her fair works did Nature link
The human soul that through me ran;
And much it grieved my heart to think
What man has made of man.

~Wordsworth

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